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The Futurists: episode 1 by mbreitweiser The Futurists: episode 1 by mbreitweiser
Episode 1 of "The Futurists." Due to a couple of interviews hitting today, we decided to launch a few hours early.

Feel free to spread it around far and wide. We would really like to see this series take off!

Script - Patrick Stiles
Art - me

More info and RSS feed at WhoAreTheFuturists.com: [link]
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Critique by tonyguaraldibrown Jun 30, 2009, 8:29:04 PM
Mitch,
your pacing is incredibly strong, as the guys at Marvel obviously know. I don't have much criticism with this page, I'm intrigued about what is to come and I like your 'hand'. My only real issue is the way you treat your environment. the water feels false against those real characters and ships. I know water is difficult and you have a loose quick feel about your work, but i think those thin lines are not helping, they looked rush and left for last. Bust out some Alex Toth Zorro and see what he does with a few quick silhouttes and marks.

Light is good but shadows could be stronger, especially with this sense of danger and night. Both characters are too well lit. Two small criticisms but hopefully they help. I'm really glad you're pushing your own work, and I think with the story telling chops you've built up over the last 2 years, this project will be great.

Good luck and i'll be looking for more pages.

Tony Brown
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I have to agree with Tony's assessment on the water. The only other things that stick out to me are the rain and the gun in the last panel. There's not much depth to it and doesn't seem to obscure any background details. The sound effect is almost invisible and should pop more. As a small nitpick, the powder in the rifle is going to be pretty useless because of the rain.

However, the strong character depiction and writing more are much stronger components. I look forward to seeing where and how the story progresses. The title and this initial page have definitely captured my interest.
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bowie-lover Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2009
Is this series sold in stores? I swear I saw a comic book series called the Futurists in the Comic Book Shop last time I visited.
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mbreitweiser Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2009  Professional General Artist
Nope. Online only, and FREE!
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bowie-lover Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2009
hmmm.....Then what was that I saw????
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pablolarah Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
Great artwork. I love the color.
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pablolarah Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
Great artwork. I love the color.
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kungfuviking Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2009  Student Artist
I am really, really excited for this. I'm on board.
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mbreitweiser Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2009  Professional General Artist
very cool. Thanks!
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Dan-Van-Cool Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Really Nice work Mitch. Love that square chalk brush. I use it almost exclusively.
Im to do some digital sequentials now :D
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Talandir Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2009
Intriguing story and great storytelling. My only suggestion would be to add at least a thin line around the word balloons and captions. As they are now the white of the balloons is bleeding into the art a bit and I think it's a bit distracting from the images. Looking forward to reading this series.
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cjam496 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
cool...really cool, but I don't think that rifle will work if he just put that ammo in there

The whole art style and everything just goes together :thumbsup: you deserve standing ovations
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