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Episode 1 of "The Futurists." Due to a couple of interviews hitting today, we decided to launch a few hours early.

Feel free to spread it around far and wide. We would really like to see this series take off!

Script - Patrick Stiles
Art - me

More info and RSS feed at WhoAreTheFuturists.com: [link]

Critiques


:icondub-t:
I have to agree with Tony's assessment on the water. The only other things that stick out to me are the rain and the gun in the last panel. There's not much depth to it and doesn't seem to obscure any background details. The sound effect is almost invisible and should pop more. As a small nitpick, the powder in the rifle is going to be pretty useless because of the rain.

However, the strong character depiction and writing more are much stronger components. I look forward to seeing where and how the story progresses. The title and this initial page have definitely captured my interest.
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:icontonyguaraldibrown:
Mitch,
your pacing is incredibly strong, as the guys at Marvel obviously know. I don't have much criticism with this page, I'm intrigued about what is to come and I like your 'hand'. My only real issue is the way you treat your environment. the water feels false against those real characters and ships. I know water is difficult and you have a loose quick feel about your work, but i think those thin lines are not helping, they looked rush and left for last. Bust out some Alex Toth Zorro and see what he does with a few quick silhouttes and marks.

Light is good but shadows could be stronger, especially with this sense of danger and night. Both characters are too well lit. Two small criticisms but hopefully they help. I'm really glad you're pushing your own work, and I think with the story telling chops you've built up over the last 2 years, this project will be great.

Good luck and i'll be looking for more pages.

Tony Brown
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:iconsilverskullguy:
Cool work. The mood is perfectly set

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Smile, Jesus loves you.
:icongio2286:
great storytelling, dude.

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you don't have to get dirty to get funky!
:icongio2286:
no prob, man. looking good so far! looking forward to read more!

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you don't have to get dirty to get funky!
:iconjohnnycastle:
Looks real good. And refreshing to see a comic page with restrained use of bold lettering. Looking forward to see more.

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We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking up your mother's skirt.
:iconfabriccio:
I like your style man!

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:icongrey-cain:
Awesome work, man! Can't wait for the next one!

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"No one can dictate what we are, but us. And as long as you can look yourself in the mirror everyday... the world's just going to have to deal." - Joseph Cain (7/8/09)
:iconsheldongoh:
Hey hey! Congratulations to you both! This is off to a really promising start. I've subscribed to the feed in Google Reader and I'm really looking forward to reading this as it unfolds. :)
:iconjonrosscomics:
very awesome and inviting first page

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